Welcome to my first blog post. Among other things, thank you for reading this far into this rough draft of a site! Feel free to comment here any edits or suggestions you may have for the site’s organization, the projects and their descriptions, and the site as a whole.
If you’re part of my committee (looking at you Dr. Nahrwold!), keep in mind that the main edits I’m seeking at this phase are the following:
- Is the layout easy navigate? Are there sections of the website you had difficulty finding or navigating?
- Do the project descriptions make sense, while having both enough but not too much information?
- Do the project graphics work, or are they too repetitive?
- Is there anything I should add that’s not currently here (such as more blog posts, links to social media, etc.)?
7 responses to “Hello world!”
* Layout: You start at the top with specific project categories, yet later you add the line “Tenzing’s Projects Broken Down,” then you write “Project Categories,” then you repeat what you’d listed at the “top” of your home page. ?????
Seems to me that a more “elegant” (in the linguistic sense) layout would be to have the phrase “Project Categories” at the top and then when a reader hovers over that phrase, she (e.g., Dr. C!), you’d see “Editing Projects” “Design Projects” “Applied Research Projects” pop up in either a horizontal or vertical format. Within each project category, include the descriptions that you’d had “farther down.” Make sense?
So you can then delete that line about projects being broken down as well as the Project Categories line with its accompanying text.
Stay tuned for my next comment on project graphics.
Rats. I just lost a whole boatload of commentary. . . .
Project graphics: Your “home” picture works–is that part of the retreat in NW Arkansas? It works.
What doesn’t work are the pictures you put next to text: actually, all the pictures included within Key Projects/Featured Work–isn’t one title enough? The pictures/visuals don’t support the text; in fact, the picture above the “D&D Case Study” could easily offend part of your audience–remember global graphics?
The same goes for the picture you’ve placed with “Project Experience Tailored to Applying Language Theory to Editing Practices” as well as for the picture with “Searching for Future Professional Experience in Teaching, Editing, and Writing.”
Let me work out a layout plan, which I will send you in a separate e-mail. O.k.?
Before I forget–had a scribbled note on a piece of paper–
* For your phone number, use either en dashes or periods. Don’t use hyphens. Wanted to tell you this before I forgot.
Yet more short, sweet, and to the point:
* Why are you writing in third-person here? In your doing so, you come across (at least to me) as being distanced from your work. Why not use first-person? I, me, my. . .
And in the text about COSMOS, I’d delete the last few words: “to avoid possible plagiarism.” Sometimes saying less is the way to go.
Looking at your About section . . . remember that you’ve yet to defend your portfolio. So although it may seem as if I’m nitpicking here, I suggest that you write in the future tense regarding your graduating.
What do you think?
Tenzing, sorry about the late start today. Been thinking a lot about my late colleague and “friend for the long haul” Dr. Michael Kleine.
Regarding the text under your “Hello world!” heading, I have a few edits:
* first paragraph, second line: insert “with” between “here” and “any” so that the text reads thus: “Feel free to comment here with any edits. . . .”
* first bulleted list item: insert “to” between “easy” and “navigate” so that the text reads thus: “Is the layout easy to navigate?”
* second bulleted list item: delete the comma before “while.”
Onward I go!
Dr. C
Wanted to make sure that you got my comment about no links to your key projects. I know how busy you are–I am as well–but we need links to all the headings under key projects as well as the heading to the left of your Blog heading, which also needs to be linked (not the blog text).
What I’ve written here is clear enough, I think: We’ve already spoken/e-mailed/texted about this issue.
Monday, Monday . . .